Wednesday, 11 February 2015

Title: this is me

Success Criteria:

  • Draft
  • Title
  • Does it have a clear beginning, middle and end?
  • Does it use adjectives to make the descriptions better?(these could describe size, colour, texture etc.)
  • Juicy words - deep blue eyes like the sparkling sky
  • language features - similes
  • punctuation - Does it have capital letters at the start of each sentence and full stops at the ends?
  • Is it exciting so you can draw the reader in
  • make sure it makes sense - Proof read
WALT describe

I dark brown hair like branches on a tree.
My eyes are light green like the solid green grass and my lips are a soft pink.
I like hip hop and netball. I love pets but my Favorite pet is a puppy.
I love maths but I don't know how long that will last!!!
Somtimes when I'm bored I like to thread some looms. 
Parris gobel is my idal she is a famous dance teacher. 
I'm right handed but I click with my left hand.
I am Peara and this is me.

1 comment:

  1. Ka rawe Peara, you have used some great smilies to your writing. Maybe next time you could proof read you writing for spelling mistakes. Thank you Rosie