Wednesday, 23 March 2016

El Rancho writing

WALT : write a persuasive argument 

Description:this is my persuasive writing from El Rancho we had to persuade someone to go to El Rancho or persuade someone not to go! 
 
Feedback: I like your clear photos and your organised paragraphs - grace 

Statement : Is El Rancho a safe and friendly environment. 

Opening : I am here to tell you about this amazing camp site called El Rancho. As you arrive at El you will get an lovely welcome by the instructors. There is definitely a good side about El Rancho. Clearly El Rancho is a safe and friendly place.


Point 1: I heard a rumour that camping at El Rancho is not a safe place to stay. There are a couple of dangerous activities but there are safety gear and instructors to keep you safe. There is a safety line at most activities and you stay behind this at all times unless a instructor tells you that you can pass that line.


Point 2: First of all let me put this straight the cabins are safe because there are locks. Plus teachers are outside of your cabins to make sure you go to sleep calm and quiet, up and running ready for the next big day. You will find that the cabins are easy to get settled in to which makes it way easier to be cormfortable with where you are sleeping. 


Point 3: Above all the meals are great. El Rancho also provides the meals like lunch dinner etc. you can choose what you want for breakfast. You don't have to stick to one thing each morning. Also when you walk in the dinning room is all set up very nicely.


Conclusion: So as a result some people might disagree but you can tell I agree there are many good reasons to agree. It is a great place just to get away with your family and have a good time.








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